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Min's drabble: Identical

Posted on 2008.09.08 at 22:07
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Hi Min.  I've been seriously in the writing doldrums these days, but did manage to write your drabble this evening.  Not the most inspired I've been, and damned if I could make it come out to exactly any word count.  It's close to 250. Not as good as your drabbles, but hopefully you'll get a smile out of it at least.

Identical

“Well, I’m done with it,” Elladan declared, thumping down next to his brother.  “I’m sick to death
of,‘which one are you?’ and ‘how do you tell them apart?’ and ‘good thing you aren’t dressed
alike.’  I swear, Elro, I’m thinking of doing something drastic.”

“Like what?”  Elrohir said abstractedly.  He was crouched on the floor, carefully placing a toy
warrior in a vast battlefield, which had taken weeks to assemble.  He chuckled, “Look,  I’ve got
Morgoth trapped.”

Elladan swept the first line of defense away with his hand.  “You aren’t even listening to me!”

“Look what you did!  You’ve let him escape!” 

“Good.”

“Are you sorry we’re twins.  Is that it?”

“Yes, I’m sorry.  I don’t want to be anymore.”

“Then,” Elrohir shrugged as he methodically began replacing his warriors.  “You’ll just have to
find a wizard to change your shape.”

“I’d rather you changed yours!  You’d make a very good orc.”   

“Are you determined to pick a fight?” Elrohir shouted.  “Because now you’ve got one!” 
He leapt upon his brother and they proceeded to demolish an entire legion of Noldor.

******

“Hold this, Elladan,” Celebrian said as she pressed a cold piece of meat over his swollen eye.
She clicked her tongue.  “Honestly, why are you two brawling again? You should be ashamed of
yourselves.” 

Elladan and Elrohir glowered at each other.

Then Celebrian smiled.  “Isn’t that cute? You’ve managed to give each other identical
black eyes!” 

Twin groans were heard clear to the stables.




 


Comments:


Oshun
heartofoshun at 2008-09-09 05:44 (UTC) (Link)
Oh, that's funny. I was chuckling all the way through, but you got my laugh-out-loud laugh when Celebrian said, "Isn’t that cute?" (I think she was channeling me there. It took me a long time time to figure out the quickest way to upset kids is to say "Isn't that cute?" when they are already bothered about something, even when they don't have twin issues. Everyone knows twins are just sooo cute and really ahte to hear it.)

Oh, on the subject of drabbles, I have started on the one I owe you. No ETA yet, but I've done the research and have an outline now. (No, I am not kidding! I wish I were.)
elfscribe5
elfscribe5 at 2008-09-09 16:42 (UTC) (Link)
Hey Oshun, glad you enjoyed it. You've done research and an outline? Jeez! That would be so like me to do. I look forward to it.
Pecos
pecos at 2008-09-09 06:28 (UTC) (Link)
Poor Elladan! To be stuck looking like his absolutely gorgeous twin...forever! It's a sorry fate indeed! Very cruel of Elrohir not to become an Orc.
elfscribe5
elfscribe5 at 2008-09-09 16:43 (UTC) (Link)
I know so tough for poor Elladan and Elrohir. I'm thinking when they get older, they might appreciate each other more. *g*
Jay of Lasgalen
jay_of_lasgalen at 2008-09-09 08:27 (UTC) (Link)
*Snicker*

I love it - especially the identical black eyes!

elfscribe5
elfscribe5 at 2008-09-09 16:44 (UTC) (Link)
Thanks Jay!
Minuial Nuwing
minuial_nuwing at 2008-09-09 11:00 (UTC) (Link)
More than a smile, dear - an absolute chortle! **grin**

Poor babies. Even their black eyes match! **hee** You caught the spirit of brotherly annoyance so very well.

Thank you so much!

**hugs**
elfscribe5
elfscribe5 at 2008-09-09 16:45 (UTC) (Link)
Mmm, glad you got a giggle out of it. I can see why you enjoy writing younger twins. Am almost tempted to write an ahhh isn't that cute fic. LOL.
chaotic_binky
chaotic_binky at 2008-09-09 11:21 (UTC) (Link)
Made me chuckle!

Hugs Binky xxxxx
elfscribe5
elfscribe5 at 2008-09-09 16:46 (UTC) (Link)
Glad to give you a giggle. Thanks!
Weeping Naiad
weepingnaiad at 2008-09-09 11:37 (UTC) (Link)
Funny and so perfect at capturing sibling irritation (whether twins or not)!

Loved Celebrian's line.

*hugs*
WN
elfscribe5
elfscribe5 at 2008-09-09 16:59 (UTC) (Link)
Thanks WN. And ooh you have JRM as Elladan. Nimaweh made me a couple of lovely twins manips using him as a model. (X rated) Want them?

Edited at 2008-09-09 04:59 pm (UTC)
Weeping Naiad
weepingnaiad at 2008-09-09 18:24 (UTC) (Link)
Oh, that'd be wonderful! I've got Elladan on the brain (well, he and Thranduil actually) lately!

Thank you!
Aglarien
aglarien1 at 2008-09-10 02:25 (UTC) (Link)
LOL! That's adorable and hilarious at the same time!

*hugs*
elfscribe5
elfscribe5 at 2008-09-11 00:08 (UTC) (Link)
Thanks Agie!
helena_s_renn
helena_s_renn at 2008-09-10 04:24 (UTC) (Link)
*snorts* just like my teenagers (who aren't twins). moody little buggers, huh? well, i guess they'll have to find some other way of distinguishing themselves.
elfscribe5
elfscribe5 at 2008-09-11 00:07 (UTC) (Link)
I have two teenagers also - must have been channeling 'em - LOL - they can get into some hellacious fights. Thanks for the fb.
malinorne2003
malinorne2003 at 2008-09-10 17:18 (UTC) (Link)
Inspired or not, it was a fun read, and I especially liked how you effectively place the scene in Middle-earth with the little references to history. A less accomplished writer would just have said 'toy soldiers'.
elfscribe5
elfscribe5 at 2008-09-11 00:11 (UTC) (Link)
Thanks Mal! Much appreciated. I enjoyed the twins destroying the legion of Noldor myself. *g*
erfan_starled
erfan_starled at 2008-09-28 16:58 (UTC) (Link)
Oh, very neatly done! You didn't fancy a pink one and a yellow striped one then? *g*
elfscribe5
elfscribe5 at 2008-09-28 17:23 (UTC) (Link)
Hey, glad you enjoyed, Erfan. Do black eyes come in those colors?
erfan_starled
erfan_starled at 2008-09-28 18:00 (UTC) (Link)
*patiently* pink dressed twin, yellow and green striped dressed twin... No, not black eyes though yes, they do come in red and yellow and green. Just not striped and differentiated by twin.

Can't believe I'm discussing this.

Retires.
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