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Drabbles

Posted on 2008.08.23 at 16:33
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Posting the first three of my 8 drabbles here.  Recipients have already commented, so no need to do so again. 
All these should be 100 words exactly.

For talullahred   request  something from The Persian Boy by Mary Renault
Triumph
They have drenched me in a primal sound like the surf’s thunderous exaltation. “Bagoas! Bagoas!” they roar.  A seething motion of limbs and faces, colored banners waving in frenzy.  I am drunk on it. So, this is what it’s like for him.  This adulation.  No wonder he craves it.  “Go on,” someone prods.   I see a beloved face, glint of golden hair, and mount the stairs on Eros-gifted wings.  He sets the laurel wreath on my head, eyes bright with pride that is for me alone.  The others recede and all sound fades except for the beating of my heart.

          
For red_lasbelin   request - Glorfindel from Osse’s Gift
Substitute
He was not Erestor, this pale elf who eyed him longingly over the glass of claret.   He did not possess a sweep of ebony hair and glittering eyes, nor a haughty tilt to the chin that, charm as he might, Glorfindel could not cajole or soften.  He did not dance like a dragonfly, or eat strawberries with a frisson of longing. He could not vivisect some foolish fop with a honeyed word nor curse like a wounded soldier.  He did not glare when Glorfindel's hand slid over another’s willing arse. He was not Erestor.  But he would have to do.
          

For ennorwen   request:  Richard and Alec from Swordspoint
Explanation: This is from the scene where Richard discovers Alec has taken a powerful drug called "Fool's Delight." 
"The stars are watching me," he [Alec]declared in a voice of terrible pain. "Make them stop!"

Besotted
The stars wanted to tear out his eyes.  Equations prowled the room, inking themselves on the curtains, marching to the tune of a sickly sweet smell. Manacle bruises marked his wrists. His tongue so thick. The book his only hope. He cradled it, caressed the cool, burgundy leather against his cheek. Richard’s gift of love.  They wanted to take it from him: they,  the dreadful stars, Lord Horn, the Duchess, and the twittering bat‑like scholars. Well, they couldn’t have it!  He opened the grate, and one at a time, tore out the creamy pages, and fed them to the fire.


 

Comments:


lenine2
lenine2 at 2008-08-24 06:14 (UTC) (Link)
I loved these and read your AiA fic, too. I love your twins, and am glad to see them again. I *really* love your twins.
elfscribe5
elfscribe5 at 2008-08-24 21:46 (UTC) (Link)
Oh glad you liked the AiA story. Good to know. Thanks for commenting lenine.
grondfic
grondfic at 2008-08-24 08:32 (UTC) (Link)
Absolutely gorgeous - all of them. Thanks for sharing.
elfscribe5
elfscribe5 at 2008-08-24 21:47 (UTC) (Link)
Glad you liked 'em.
Cheers!
Minuial Nuwing
minuial_nuwing at 2008-08-24 12:42 (UTC) (Link)
These are all lovely, Elfscribe.

I read Bagoas at the original post - still gorgeous! Glorfindel from Osse's Gift caught me, of course. I could just see him. I am not familiar with the characters in the last drabble, but it still broke my heart.

Well done!

**hugs**
elfscribe5
elfscribe5 at 2008-08-24 21:55 (UTC) (Link)
Thanks Min. The Bagoas one is altered and much better now, I think. I made the sound of it like a wave coming ashore, washing back, coming again and then retreating a last time with the last sentence - the beating of his heart. I don't know if you can hear it in the words. That was an experiment since the opening of Illiad in the original Greek does the same thing.

The drabbles are a great exercise and a lot harder than appear at first glance. I have even greater appreciation for how good yours are.

I'm pleased that the last drabble affected you in that way, because it really is a sad moment. In the story Richard comes upon Alec, "sotted on Delight" the drug, and feeding the pages into the fire of the gift he gave him and exactly why he is doing that isn't explained. I think my drabble explanation works completely in canon. And if you haven't read Swordspoint by Ellen Kushner recommend you go immediately to Amazon and order it. You can get a used copy from them for virtually nothing. Wonderful book, as are the other ones in the series, Fall of the Kings and Privilege of the Sword. And I think the relationship between Richard and Alec is so well done. They are such good characters. I could rant on. If interested, you can check out my review of it under my memories section.
hugs.
erfan_starled
erfan_starled at 2008-08-24 14:28 (UTC) (Link)
You are just so good. Just - good. The last one makes me want to go and read everything about them both.

I really like the edge of seedy use and hurt in the Glorfindel one. The first one is very subtle. Moving.
elfscribe5
elfscribe5 at 2008-08-24 21:45 (UTC) (Link)
Thanks Erfan! If you haven't read Swordspoint and the other 2 books in the series, I completely and wholeheartedly recommend them. Beautifully written, great characters, great for politics and world-building and everything. Not to mention the relationship between Richard and Alec which is wonderful and unusual.
Illyria
illyria_novia at 2009-01-20 13:46 (UTC) (Link)
Oh, two of my favorite fandoms!

I love the Bagoas drabble for highlighting that triumph in Karmania. He led such a low-profile existence in the shadow of Alexander, that surely to be hailed by so many, to be so widely accepted, embraced and endorsed (by the crusty Macedonians no less) was a novelty for him, and, clever you, taught him why Alexander was addicted to and sustained by it, the wave of encouragement and adulation.

And your Swordspoint drabble, ah! What a perfect gapfiller for that scene. When I read that part in the book, I wanted to smack Alec across the face for destroying a gift that Richard had taken so much effort to procure. Reading this, I can understand, and even sympathize with him. Thanks for the enlightenment. :)
elfscribe5
elfscribe5 at 2009-01-22 02:51 (UTC) (Link)
Hi Illyria - glad you enjoyed the drabbles. Yes, I find I often write gapfillers when I don't understand the original scene. I was like you, wondering why on earth Alec would have done something like that, and this made sense to me.
Cheers hon!
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