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Posted chapter last night

Posted on 2004.08.03 at 14:20
Whew - this last chapter was tougher going than I anticipated. Ended up adding some more scenes and doing a lot of revising. It was hard to try to work in all those flashbacks gracefully but I needed to sum up some of the action or I'd never get this thing done. Cas sent me a friendly reminder on Sunday that I'd promised to get it out this weekend. [Guilty look] So, anyway, Cas, here ya go. It's back to NC-17. Yippy. Hope you all enjoy. I think I've got one more chapter - which I hope to get finished this week. No promises this time.

Comments:


dalogas at 2004-08-03 14:48 (UTC) (Link)

Elfscribe's biggest fan here!

Hi, sweetie. I'm a little late to your party here, but better late than never, right? I'm new to this Live Journal thing too and a bit unsure as to how it works. I'll get it figured out though. Eventually.

I love your story, ES. Your artistry grows with every piece. I think your idea about 'The Fall of Numenor' is an excellent one, and I look forward to your telling of the tale.

Well, Ch. 13 is a hot one. And not at all how I would have imagined the two of them together. Hmm. How rough and humanish. And you know how I love that. *wink* Seriously though. Very hot scene. GW, if you understand my meaning.

I loved Glori's first comment afterwards. I LOL'd when I read it.

The flashback transitions were very clear and worked well. I was never disoriented timelinewise.

The burial scene was very poignant. I loved the detail of Elwin resining his bow. When I read it, I remember asking myself "Is he going to play something?" When Leggy hears Elwin start to play a paragraph or so later, the earlier detail helps to create a very effective continuity flow. It was a chilling and effective image, Leggy in the treetops listening to the music. I also liked Elwin starting several songs before his final choice. Nice touch.

Oh, I have to comment on Estel's appearance here. Wonderful foreshadowing. And not too much. Just enough to pique the interest, but not enough that it detracts from the current story.

As usual, I loved it. You rock!

Hiro hîdh,
Dalo
elfscribe5
elfscribe5 at 2004-08-03 21:50 (UTC) (Link)

Re: Elfscribe's biggest fan here!

Hey Dalo!
So good to see you here. Yep, the LJ thing is great. I'm a recent convert too. And I'm really quite glad you "enjoyed" my latest. *g* Good to hear that the flashbacks worked okay. Whew. I did put some stuff in just for people who'd read my other fics, especially with the Estel/Aragorn touches. No one probably picked up on it, but I gave myself a giggle writing Legolas's comment about how he could taste "it" on his tongue and didn't want to get any closer. And of course we know what happens to them later.
Anyway, thanks so much for your kind and supportive comments. As you know, we authors live for it. I hope we see you around more. Maybe post your own fics on your LJ?
A chuil,
~elfscribe
laesmeralda
laesmeralda at 2004-08-03 18:46 (UTC) (Link)
Hey, Darlin',

I'm loving the richness of this tale (almost typed "tail", ahem, must work on my spelling). As usual, you give us plot, culture, and NC-17.

Just a tiny taste of the twins this time, *sigh,* but enough of your Glorfindel to satisfy. I promise to post comments on-list.

BTW, I think you should post to your LJ too. It's hard to find series on the lists and the websites have become unreliable. I'd love to be able to click here for a full rundown of my favorites.
elfscribe5
elfscribe5 at 2004-08-03 21:59 (UTC) (Link)
Esmeralda, luv,
Certainly there was some tail in this tale, *g* so your Freudian slip not so far off. I know - only a tiny taste of the twins. Considering that even the taste in this chapter and last has elicited several comments, I might have to consider more twin fics. (Oh no!) But I'm glad Glorfindel was satisfying in this one. (I think Elrond thought so too.) He really grew on me in this fic and he's now among my favs. Re: posting to LJ, maybe at some point, gotta finish writing this one first. Thank you my dear for everything.
Hugs,
~elfscribe
laurelin1980 at 2004-08-10 14:27 (UTC) (Link)
Hi, elfscribe,

I'm going to add you to my friends' list whether you like it or not! :) I just found your LJ through a friend. A belated welcome to you! I'm so glad that you're continuing this arc!

*hugs*
Laurelin
elfscribe5
elfscribe5 at 2004-08-10 21:45 (UTC) (Link)
Well hello Laurelin - glad to see you here. Hmm, I guess I have no choice. I know you recently finished your latest epic. Congrats. I am envious.Wish I was done with mine.
A chuil,
~elfscribe
Charmion
charmion at 2004-08-10 14:43 (UTC) (Link)
Hi Elfscribe,
I've been following this story and your arc on LAF/OEAM for a while now, and I love it. Multi-layered and action-packed, and not to mention terribly sexy! For me, you really nailed the elves.

I hope you don't mind me barging in like this, but would you mind if I added you?
elfscribe5
elfscribe5 at 2004-08-10 21:38 (UTC) (Link)
Charmion,
Ah, another closeted reader of Time Enough comes out. LOL. Thanks for nice comments. I think actually it's not so much that I nailed the elves but that they nailed each other. Sure add me.
Cheers,
~elfscribe
gally
nimfaeriel at 2004-08-12 12:07 (UTC) (Link)
*sniffles* aaah, i'm back for a couple of days online, and as i'm eager to read your new chapters, i frantically check your lj and my groups... how crestfallen i am to discover i can't find chapter 12!!! *sobs*

where can i find it? it's not on the elfhome group with the others... and i come to realise a few stories i read have at least one missing chapter! how weird...

if you could please pretty please indicate me the right way, i would be in your debt *smiles* i so can't wait to read your story, hurry! *giggles*

take care, i hope life treat you right!
elfscribe5
elfscribe5 at 2004-08-13 19:42 (UTC) (Link)
Hello gally dear,
Yeah, I deleted ch. 12 from elfhome and Cuivienen and tolkien_slash because of some errors and then because I didn't think anyone would care, didn't repost. So, if you want the latest on any of my fics, first check Aniron because I can upload the chappies myself there, and it's got Elisa's gorgeous pic of Leggy there for inspiration, plus you can leave a review if you care to. *g* Here's the link:
http://www.aniron.info/viewuser.php?uid=124

You can also usually find my fics on Of Elves and Men. Larian is great at frequent updates to the archive. My fics are here: http://www.ofelvesandmen.com/StoriesbyAuthor/E/Elfscribe.htm

Anyway, happy reading and hope you enjoy. Think you'll especially like ch. 13. [back to the ol' smut]
Hugs,
~elfscribe
gally
nimfaeriel at 2004-08-16 02:54 (UTC) (Link)
*grins* you know me too well! of course i loved this beautiful chapter!! oh, legolas' pic is simply gorgeous indeed.

i was delighted to see the twins and estel! they made me laugh despite the dark moment. glorfindel was amazing, as usual *wink* the suspense was so well done i was bouncing on my chair, shuddering at every blow or threat, and half talking to your wonderful characters *lol*

how i wish legolas and elwin would find a way. i've been in a crying mood for a couple of weeks and reading your story was a bit too much sometimes *giggles* i feel so frustrated for legolas who can't tell anything about smaug. and who now feels guilty *shakes head and huggles leggy* may they find a way.

as for elrond and glorfindel (aaah *swoons* glorfindel...), i'm thrilled *grins* their lovemaking was so tenderly described, you had me smiling fondly the whole time.

thank you *smiles* i wish you all the best with the next parts and in your life as well.
take care of you *hugs*
elfscribe5
elfscribe5 at 2004-08-16 18:55 (UTC) (Link)
gally dear,
Thanks as usual for your sweet comments. I'm happy you liked those two chapters and that the suspense worked for you. I'm struggling with next one now. Capella betaed the first little bit on her handheld computer while on vacation in Turkey - she is such a doll! Already it is getting too long and I may have to split the chapter into 2. Erg. Anyway, thanks again.
~elfscribe
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